Found some words. what do you think of them?

its an okay poem. Liked the aaabbccddeeffgg excetra ryme scheme. I get the meaning as everyone would. However my criticism is though its a lovely piece done magnificiently telling it came from the heart you may want to consider deeper meaning. What i mean is what you say you can tell write off the bat. You don't have a deeer meaning in the words but say in bluntly out there. i disagree with the other person though it all makes sense from begining to end. i was jus saing something u might wnt to consider. nice work though